S'frakos N'laaren (397 views)

[Kepiloth]

Given Info!


Name: S'frakos N'laaren


Species: Shoyru (Mostly  Grey with green hands and feet with blue wings)


Anthro/Quad: Anthro


Age: 23


Gender: Male


Status: Single


Job: College Student


Organisation: Lia Fáil Acadamy


Heart: Good/Bored/ ? ? ? ?


Homeland: Brightvale


House: Brightvale


Special: ADHD




Appearance


Hair: none


Eyes: Green/Hazel eyes with feminine lashes


Skin: Clean though his scales are different colors in places due to his father's experiment.

Clothing: The uniform of the Lia Fáil Academy, a white button up shirt with a burgundy vest over black trousers. Similar for woman but with short or long skirts depending on the seasons. Pants can be worn by both genders, various other clothes. All of these have an enchantment on them which makes him appear as a White Shoyru.



Personal Info!


Personality: Quiet at times, S'frakos is something of a weird guy. A reader and quick study of lore the young Shoyru has a gift for retaining knowledge he has read.  Most of his time is usually contemplating how to fix various things and correct his father's mistake. He is stubborn to a fault and not likely to back down from a fight. S'frakos also is intelligent but not too wise. He can be trick or manipulated especially if his loved ones are involved.  He can be a bit akward and sometimes says the wrong thing making everyone angry at him.


Past: Kelton and Samantha N'laaren wished to have a child. However the FER potion that allows different species to have children was expensive. He tried his hardest to brew up his own batch with the result being a strange glowing concoction. He and his wife then tried to sire an heir. There were however, side effects including weakness in one's extremities, nausea, and the temporary loss of one's magic.

The potion worked, but the side effects caused S'frakos to be born with a strange blend of colors. Kelton recovered from the side effects and found it had changed him both in form and in color. Samantha was rendered bedridden by the side effects and the stress of childbirth. It took several years for her to regain her strength. and for the most part doesn't leave the house.
 
S'frakos was mostly raised by his father. Growing up in Brightvale, and being of noble birth meant his education was top notch, however the young noble was bored. He felt little connection to Brightvale or his father. Most of his time was spent either studying or planning a big project. He finally worked up the courage to ask his father about this project. Kelton agreed reluctantly, stipulating that if things went bad he was not a part of it. 


Plus: Knows how to wield an unusual weapon called a Shotel not native to Brightvale, as well as several types of magic.
These include, but are not limited to, pyromancy, some healing and support scrolls he carries, and Snapwalking. This is a magic unique to the family that leaves a scent of ozone in the air when used.  He carries a cane which conceals a reforged Claimh Solais* . These are his only defenses at close range.


Minus: Sometimes loses his train of thought and goes off on a tangent when talking about things.
 Often is stubborn and refuses to give up even if the cause is lost.
Physically he is an average person, meaning stronger, faster, and more skilled opponents can easily beat him. He has few close range options aside from the sword cane or whacking someone on the head with a staff or other things he can lay his hands on.
Snapwalking uses more power than the average spell wearing him out faster.
He is clumsy and predictable in close quarters combat making him more suited for support fire rather than dueling or war.  



Extra: He will eventually change to a much different color scheme.

Most of his spells are store bought but a few are unique combinations.

Pyromancy/Fire Magic : Pyromancy is the art of controlling heat and flame. While most use it to throw fireballs or set monsters ablaze with a snap of their fingers.* Pyromancy can also be used to take heat from things like water allowing one to freeze over a lake.

 Snapwalking/ Allows him to shift his position or the position of an item relative to a specific point, object, or person as decided by the user leaving the scent of ozone at the starting and ending point of the walk. Momentum built up in a direction stays even if the direction changes. So if one falls and snapwalks so they face the other way, the momentum built up will catapult them upward.

*Like Colonel Mustang from FMA

*Pronounced roughly as /kleeve-solish/

[Raichi]

I'm curious about Kelton, this part in particular "Kelton recovered from the side effects and found it had changed him" what were the side-effects? How did they change him?

Also... I had to google cryomancy and geomancy, cryo being more of a game variety from e.g. the elder scrolls, and geomancy is apparently a form of divination, where rocks are used instead of a crystal ball. Either way, I'm fine with make-up or uncommon wordplay, but you should write what it means. I'm sure you meant frost, fire and earth/rocks magic. What's your definition of snapwalking?

About the minus, we went over this before on your other character.
For every physical strength there needs to be a physical weakness. And since you've got a very powerfull character here, he's going to need a lot of physical weaknesses before I can approve him.

[Kepiloth]

To me the use of magic is one strength and the use of a weapon that isn't from Brightvale is another strength. Keep in mind that he can be distracted. or he can hyperfocus to a point where he tunes everthing out. This means he can be stopped from casting spells early on in fights. However when he starts hyperfocusing not even the strongest attacks will stop him. His ADHD acts as both a strength and a weakness, which means three strengths and three weaknesses. aside from that he's just an average person in terms of physical strength and speed. Relying on magic to boost his stats.



Kelton's changes will be in his character sheet.

[Raichi]

ADHD is psychological.

There is a firm line between mental and physical that you seem incapable of seeing.

There needs to be a clear description on his physical weaknesses, he could be weak to e.g. wind magic, there could be a limit to his power, e.g. an artifact that is bound to his powers, that when damaged decreases his abilities.

And not even the strongest attacks will stop him when he's in a certain state is downright godmodding, I can't allow it.

[Kepiloth]

Added the fact he only has average speed and strength. And this certain state is getting nerfed. He sets up a shield and focuses his attention on a finishing blow. He only can do this under certain conditions. is that better?

[Raichi]

A little. Why are you explaining this in the comments? It should all be explained in the character sheet itself.

You still didn't write what those words mean either in the description e.g. Pyromancy(firepowers)

You need to look at the weakness as something another character can perform to counter your character's attack. Physical averageness of his own account is not something another character can perform on him. So the way your character is created now he's still pretty much unstoppable when in a fight with another character according to your minus section.

[Kepiloth]

Yeah give me some time to work on it. I have some ideas to help balance things out. Fixed his weaknesses so he is  more of a support character when in combat. Made him more vulnerable to close combat characters like Susana.

[Raichi]

Great I see you removed some of the skills that made him too powerful. If you explain the meaning of snapwalking in the character sheet like we discussed over skype I will be happy to approve him ^_^

[Kepiloth]

Awww, but I wanted a surprise. Oh well.